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Clearer Now 
8th-May-2006 07:41 pm
disney: cinderella dress
Title: Clearer Now
WC: 171
Genre: Historical, Mystery, I have no idea
Challenge: Painting of Woman
Critique: Yes
A/N: I have no idea what this is about or where it came from....

It never occurs to her that all the others think she is crazy. In fact, with each passing day, things are becoming clearer and clearer.

“Samantha, love,” her mother whispers, “please put those books away. There is nothing in them for young ladies such as yourself.”

Samantha has become skilled in ignoring her mother. The books hold the answers to all the things she wants to know – about love and sex and travel and adventure and the world. They are the windows that open her eyes to what is outside her house.

She never hears her younger sister and cousins, gossiping from the porch, that Samantha has completely lost it and will soon be put away.

It is when she discovers the book of ink blots that the world becomes clearer. It is then that she can see the meaning behind each on, the beauty that they possess.

While Samantha’s eyes are opening, while things finally begin to make sense, the rest of the world knows that she has gone insane.
9th-May-2006 04:07 am (UTC)
I liked it, definately mysterious, and definately more of a story there. The thing about the ink blots... I always think of the test that they make kids and crazy people do, very nice. In that sentence, though, I think you meant to put behind each one instead of behind each on.

Also, the last sentence, consider making the second while when instead. It might help out the flow.

I really need an icon for this place.
13th-May-2006 05:17 am (UTC)
thank you ma'am! I love getting critiqued. does that make me weird or just concieted? haha
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